In the beginning of I first started reviewing a peer’s paper I would normally just focus on local revisions. I would edit vocab, grammar and the flow of sentences. In class I learned that the purpose of review both the paper of a peer, and my own paper must go much further than surface level changes. I needed to comment on the connection to the prompt and how the thesis is threaded through the entire essay. I have learned to go much more in depth in my editing, and peer reviewing and focus on global revisions first and not pay attention to small local changes until the very end. In my chosen peer review, I have made a comment to include an opposing argument such as a Naysayer paragraph in order to strengthen their argument. I also took not of the evidence use, I commented on phenomenal quotes choices along with offering advice of additional evidence that I think will work great with their argument and thesis. Another global revision that I made was taking note of if they addressed the prompt completely. In this essay, I noticed that my peer had not included a personal connection that is critical for the assignment, and left a comment informing them of this. Finally, I made some local notes about the transitions between paragraphs. This is a drastic change between the notes I would make when I first entered college. Now when I am revising my own paper, I cycle through making global and local changes. I focus on making sure my thesis is strong and connects with the rest of my paper while ensuring that is correlates with the prompt. I then look at paragraph and then sentence structure, making sure I am not too repetitive or include “fluff” into my essay.
