Peer Review 3

You did a really good job of connecting your ideas. Your analysis of evidence provided fantastic support for you’re claim that STEAM will help reduce the stress and anxiety that exist when only STEM is focused on in school. I would suggest that you include more of this topic in your introduction. Anxiety, the issue you are trying to solve in your essay, is only mentioned in the final sentence of the introduction. Threading this topic in earlier will help improve the clarity of your argument. You did a great job transitioning between ideas. The only issue that I found within your text, was there were some sentences that I think need to be reworded. Try reading your paper out loud to ensure that all of the sentences move along easily. Overall, I think you did a great job, you have picked very strong evidence and it just needs to be polished a little more.