Blog 13

During the process of combing through my essay, I noticed that I use pointing words a lot, especially she and he. I switch between their name and a pointing word in order to avoid a lot of repetition. This was similar with key words in my text as well. Since the prompt was focused around narratives, it makes sense that narrative and story were keywords throughout my piece. I would rotate between these two words to avoid a lot of repetition, however the constant use of both terms was needed throughout my work in order to get my argument across, after all, the paper is about the power of narratives. I did notice that when I didn’t use either term, I would use pointing words instead. Another pattern that I found is that most of my repetition of ideas, or restating text in a new way revolved around evidence. While I was including quotes, I would often use repetition to clarify the connection of the quotes to my thesis. While revising my paper, I will need to add repetition and transition words to both my conclusion and second to last paragraphs. Both paragraphs are a little rough, and I think that these tools can add a lot of clarity to both. I even noted a specific part of my conclusion that I think these tactics will make the paragraph a lot stronger.