You did a really great job integrating evidence with your own ideas. Your paper focuses on the positive affects of metaphors and I really enjoyed your choice of quotes and the organization of your paper. I would advise that you are careful about your word choice, there were several locations where the same words were repeated a lot. I would just take time to rephrase a few sentences or phrases so the paper flows more. Additionally, I think in some of your elaboration of quotes, you can intertwine the medical/heath aspect of your essay a little more. There were some parts where you had great thoughts, and it wasn’t until the end of the paragraph that it was tied back to your thesis of positive health effects. Overall, the paper was really well written, and you touched on everything you needed to for the prompt.
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This is fantastic. Your note is specific and thoughtful. Your quotes address a variety of specific moments in your peer’s work. Well done, Emily! Keep up the amazing work.